English Help Please?
November 15, 2009 2:25 PM Subscribe
Help me fix some problems with my English essay
(scribd link) please!
posted by kylej to Education (21 answers total) 1 user marked this as a favorite
The prompt was:
"Relay a specific incient or story about a time when you feel that you were true to yourself despite contrary influences"
Stuff I need help with:
1. Right now my essay is basically all story with little or no self reflection, is there anyway for me to add self reflection into the essay without messing up the narrative? Or do I need to change the style of my writing?
2. I had to make up some of the dialogue as this happened a few months ago. Does any of it seem fake/contrived?
3. I'm supposed to be economical in my use of language, do any parts seem overly verbose or unnecessary to main point of the essay?
Any general feedback about grammar etc is appreciated also!
If any has an questions about the assignment or my essay I'll be happy to answer.
On a side note, does anyone know another place on the internet where I can share an essay and get good feedback?