What is a more elegant/poetic way of saying: "I find you in everything that I do" ?
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What is a more elegant/poetic way of saying: "I find you in everything that I do" ?
posted by Jason and Laszlo to Writing & Language (22 answers total) 14 users marked this as a favorite
 
Thoughts of you are never far away, as everything I do there you are too.
posted by Gerard Sorme at 2:33 PM on July 10, 2010


Shameless link to my favorite artist: "Sky Blue and Black" by Jackson Browne:

"You're the color of the sky reflected in each store-front windowpane
You're the splashing of my tires in the rain
You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do
And I'll never stop looking for you
In the sunlight, in the faces on the avenue
That's the way love is
Sky blue and black"
posted by Dukat at 2:33 PM on July 10, 2010


"Everyplace I go, you are there."
posted by emhutchinson at 2:34 PM on July 10, 2010


oddly enough, i was going to suggest the exact same part of "Sky Blue and Black" that Dukat mentioned. so, seconded.
posted by gursky at 2:39 PM on July 10, 2010


Response by poster: Also, I should add, What is a more concise way of saying this phrase? (not that Browne's lyrics don't get at the heart of this phrase's meaning). thanks!
posted by Jason and Laszlo at 2:46 PM on July 10, 2010


The first line of Stan Rogers' gorgeous song "45 Years" are as follows :

"Where the earth shows its bones of wind-broken stone
And the sea and the sky are one
I'm caught out of time, my blood sings with wine
And I'm running naked in the sun
There's God in the trees, I'm weak in the knees
And the sky is a painful blue
I'd like to look around, but Honey, all I see is you."

Listen to the song here : http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZrGDoDloD1M
posted by newfers at 3:02 PM on July 10, 2010


Jason and Laszlo, I'm not sure it gets much better than the way you phrased it first.
posted by Made of Star Stuff at 3:02 PM on July 10, 2010 [5 favorites]


One of the following?:

I see you in everything.
I find you in everything.
I see you in everything I do.
I find you in everything I do.
posted by rainbaby at 3:11 PM on July 10, 2010


One of my friends likes the phrase "you are infinite" to express this sentiment.
posted by estlin at 3:33 PM on July 10, 2010


I think you yourself said it best. Very nice.
posted by fivesavagepalms at 3:39 PM on July 10, 2010 [1 favorite]


i carry your heart with me (i carry it in
my heart) i am never without it (anywhere
i go you go, my dear; and whatever is done
by only me is your doing, my darling)

-e.e. cummings

Or, slightly quicker to say: i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
posted by corn_bread at 3:53 PM on July 10, 2010 [2 favorites]


"Wherever we're going, we're going together, and wherever we're going, we're already there." – Daniel Silberberg
posted by Eshkol at 3:54 PM on July 10, 2010


Your absence has gone through me
Like thread through a needle.
Everything I do is stitched with its color.

Separation by W. S. Merwin

..........

You fit into me
like a hook into an eye

a fish hook
an open eye

You Fit Into Me by Margaret Atwood
posted by faineant at 4:05 PM on July 10, 2010 [2 favorites]


Jason and Laszlo, I felt a sudden twinge when I read the way you had phrased it originally. It's striking in its simplicity but goes so deep to the feeling that I instantly knew what you meant. So I'd go with what you wrote. I don't think you're apt to find a more elegant phrasing than that.
posted by Tiresias at 4:46 PM on July 10, 2010


Please don't use the Margaret Atwood poem. That's a very negative interpretation of a different sentiment.

Please do use your original phrasing. Simplistic and beautiful.
posted by PhoBWanKenobi at 5:53 PM on July 10, 2010 [3 favorites]


I hear your voice in everything.
posted by dobbs at 5:56 PM on July 10, 2010


"You're in the colours of the sky
The air is written with your name"

From Rebecca's Empire's Atomic Electric
posted by Admira at 6:13 PM on July 10, 2010


"I'll Be Seeing You" (Kahal/Fain)

I'll be seeing you
In all the old familiar places
That this heart of mine embraces
All day through

In that small cafe
The park across the way
The children's carousel
The chestnut trees, the wishing well

I'll be seeing you
In every lovely summers day
In everything that's bright and gay
I'll always think of you that way

I'll find you in the morning light
And when the day is through
I'll be looking at the moon
But I'll seeing you.

Performed by Billie Holiday
posted by briank at 6:27 PM on July 10, 2010 [1 favorite]


From Pip's declaration of unrequited love to Estella in Great Expectations:

"Out of my thoughts! You are part of my existence, part of myself. You have been in every line I have ever read, since I first came here, the rough common boy whose poor heart you wounded even then. You have been in every prospect I have ever seen since - on the river, on the sails of the ships, on the marshes, in the clouds, in the light, in the darkness, in the wind, in the woods, in the sea, in the streets. You have been the embodiment of every graceful fancy that my mind has ever become acquainted with. The stones of which the strongest London buildings are made, are not more real, or more impossible to be displaced by your hands, than your presence and influence have been to me, there and everywhere, and will be. Estella, to the last hour of my life, you cannot choose but remain part of my character, part of the little good in me, part of the evil. But, in this separation I associate you only with the good, and I will faithfully hold you to that always, for you must have done me far more good than harm, let me feel now what sharp distress I may. O God bless you, God forgive you!"
posted by marsha56 at 7:04 PM on July 10, 2010


Everywhere I look I can see your face.

(Line from "Her Face" in the musical "Carnival," except the lyric was "her" not "your.")
posted by GaelFC at 9:23 PM on July 10, 2010


Simplicity is its own poetry, and I think your original phrasing was beautiful. Nthing those that say to go with that.
posted by lwb at 2:02 AM on July 11, 2010 [1 favorite]


Everywhere I look I see your eyes.
posted by ersatz at 7:37 AM on July 12, 2010


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