Cliche Job-Search Language
April 29, 2018 5:36 PM Subscribe
Help! Please help me not sound like a d-bag in my cover letter.
Pretty straightforward:
I am applying for a creative role and having trouble sorting out filler language from helpful in my cover letter. Is it cliche to talk about one's "vision?" No, I'm not bragging about my 20/30 eyesight--more like, "my current role demands leadership, creativity, and vision." I can't tell if it reads as filler copy or not.
Any insights would be much appreciated. Thanks!!!!
Pretty straightforward:
I am applying for a creative role and having trouble sorting out filler language from helpful in my cover letter. Is it cliche to talk about one's "vision?" No, I'm not bragging about my 20/30 eyesight--more like, "my current role demands leadership, creativity, and vision." I can't tell if it reads as filler copy or not.
Any insights would be much appreciated. Thanks!!!!
"Leadership, creative drive, and clarity of vision" would be stronger.
posted by DarlingBri at 6:14 PM on April 29, 2018 [2 favorites]
posted by DarlingBri at 6:14 PM on April 29, 2018 [2 favorites]
What about 'strategic vision'? Then you could give some examples of how you were able to execute on your big-picture thinking.
posted by Pademelon at 6:18 PM on April 29, 2018 [1 favorite]
posted by Pademelon at 6:18 PM on April 29, 2018 [1 favorite]
Response by poster: Thank you for the great suggestions, everyone! Does this make sense?
In a role that demands thought leadership, creative drive, and strategic vision, I’ve been tasked with energizing a X-year-old brand for a new generation of consumers. I’ve worked to imbue copy across all communication channels with fresh, youthful appeal, and I strive each day to find creative solutions and amplify the brand: In a recent promotional contest that would publish selected consumers' writing for monetary reward, it was I who coined this as a “guest columnist” role with a built-in readership, a marketing strategy that would offer additional cache and incentive for contest participants.
posted by shelle at 6:33 PM on April 29, 2018
In a role that demands thought leadership, creative drive, and strategic vision, I’ve been tasked with energizing a X-year-old brand for a new generation of consumers. I’ve worked to imbue copy across all communication channels with fresh, youthful appeal, and I strive each day to find creative solutions and amplify the brand: In a recent promotional contest that would publish selected consumers' writing for monetary reward, it was I who coined this as a “guest columnist” role with a built-in readership, a marketing strategy that would offer additional cache and incentive for contest participants.
posted by shelle at 6:33 PM on April 29, 2018
The second sentence is a little run-on. I recommend simplifying: after the colon, try something like "For a recent promotional contest featuring consumer submissions, I created a "guest columnist" role to ensure built-in readership, adding incentive and cachet."
This link to clarify correct spelling of cachet.
posted by Miko at 6:56 PM on April 29, 2018 [3 favorites]
This link to clarify correct spelling of cachet.
posted by Miko at 6:56 PM on April 29, 2018 [3 favorites]
I don't know what "amplify the brand" means. I'd replace that colon with a period and simplify what comes after the colon. But other than that, it all makes sense to me.
posted by salvia at 6:58 PM on April 29, 2018 [1 favorite]
posted by salvia at 6:58 PM on April 29, 2018 [1 favorite]
Response by poster: OMG, I'm a hack, y'all. Thanks for the clarification re: cache vs. cachet, Miko!
posted by shelle at 7:04 PM on April 29, 2018
posted by shelle at 7:04 PM on April 29, 2018
When I read "In a role that demands..." the snarky DrGail thought "Okay, that's what the role demands. But did s/he meet those demands?" However, I would sit up and take notice if I read "My success in this job was built upon thought leadership, creative drive, and strategic vision..." And I read a lot of resumes in my job.
posted by DrGail at 7:23 PM on April 29, 2018 [6 favorites]
posted by DrGail at 7:23 PM on April 29, 2018 [6 favorites]
In a role that demands thought leadership, creative drive, and strategic vision, I’m responsible for energizing a X-year-old brand for a new generation of consumers. I create copy across all communication channels with a fresh, youthful appeal, and every day I find and incorporate creative solutions to amplify the brand. For example, in a recent promotion where [COMPANY NAME] paid for and published writing from selected consumers, my strategy of framing the contest reward as a "guest columnist" role with a built-in readership helped generate interest and incentive for contest participants seeking an extra level of prestige.
(I used to do executive bios for work.)
posted by mochapickle at 8:25 PM on April 29, 2018 [6 favorites]
(I used to do executive bios for work.)
posted by mochapickle at 8:25 PM on April 29, 2018 [6 favorites]
oh, oh, change framing to positioning -- more appropriate
posted by mochapickle at 8:41 PM on April 29, 2018 [1 favorite]
posted by mochapickle at 8:41 PM on April 29, 2018 [1 favorite]
"... based on my role as a thought leader, creative visionary and strategic innovator..."
posted by I_Love_Bananas at 2:26 AM on April 30, 2018
posted by I_Love_Bananas at 2:26 AM on April 30, 2018
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