Help me improve my writing skills?!
September 28, 2010 7:48 PM   Subscribe

Help me make my writing more descriptive, captivating, and fluid. Anyone's help welcome!

I am taking a university level English literature and composition class and flailing. Writing has never been my strong point, and I am looking to improve my skills by peer critique and revision. Below is a link to an assignment essay I was given, due Thursday.

Prompt: Write a narrative that explains to a friend how you became involved in an interest, its effect on you, why you like it etc...

My professor is looking for: IMAGERY, DOMINANT FEELING.
If any one can suggest revisions to word choice, gramatical constructions -- things that will make the essay "pop", that's what I'm looking for (especially in the introduction!)

To me it just doesn't sound well written enough for the university level. Thank you!

LINK TO ESSAY
posted by ptsampras14 to Education (1 answer total)

This post was deleted for the following reason: this is way too much "do my homework" filter and not at all enough "I have a problem to solve" AskMe isn't really for getting writing critiques. -- jessamyn

 
This will get deleted.
posted by dfriedman at 7:55 PM on September 28, 2010


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